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sapoche submitted a contest entry to
Write A Poem About Where And When You Feel Most At Peace 1 years ago Sapoche
Jesus RomanI fall into a trance… One where I live through my peaceful desires. Seeing myself drifting on the musical waves of my bass strings, croaking in harmony.
I land into another vision, one where I’m bringing peace with my fist. I train the martial art to release the heat. I take a left and a right to the jaw, slipping out of my trance. Rattle, Rattle, as I croak in harmony.
When I wake, I shake my head in disbelief… I made it. I’m back on my lily pad just drifting down stream. Take it easy Bufo!!!
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Great work! I love the part where you said “Seeing myself drifting on the musical waves of my bass strings, croaking in harmony.” Music is amazing in that it can be interpreted in so many different ways and that people can have different tastes in what they listen to. I am so glad that music has inspired you in such a powerful way and that it has become a form of peace for you. Thank you so much for sharing!!
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Thank you for your response to my poem, I am really appreciative of your support, especially since it was my first challenge. I hope to improve with every challenge I complete.
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Of course!! Keep writing, and yes, you will definitely keep improving!
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Exercise and music are two very peaceful places, and I find myself in another state when I am exposed to them. You really reminded me of my own experiences that I don’t always fully acknowledge or maybe I am not completely aware of in the moment. Thanks for sharing, and thank you for being part of our community.
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Great use of imagery in your story, loved the first and last sections! Especially the last part where you wake up drifting on a lilly pad, it ties the whole piece together with the other bits where you are croaking in between dreams.
I’m assuming that’s your own drawing? I like the haphazard style, it’s a great compliment to the last part of “taking it easy”. A part of me wants to see a cartoon or comic series of the frog hanging out and playing bass or doing martial arts, providing wisdom in between sessions.
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